- https://youtu.be/a1xtrOfoDJo
- My responses to my video were generally positive. The main thing that stood out to me was that I should create more detail about what my idea was with my business proposition.
- I decided to add more detail about the user interface of the app for my business and state the different things that you can achieve on the app.
Thursday, March 19, 2020
Elevator Pitch No. 2
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Hi Patrick,
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job utilizing the figures to support your app. I think you have a viable business model, and that you would be helping to solve a common problem that people run into when choosing a restaurant. My suggestions for improvement on your next pitch would be to work on picking up the pace of your speech. This will come across as more enthusiastic to your audience. Also, try not to sound too scripted, although your speech was on point and very informative. Good job on your pitch, and I am looking forward to seeing your progress on number three. Best regards, Darren.
Hi Patrick,
ReplyDeleteI think it's really smart that you added more detail about the user interface, so that listeners to your pitch will have a better understanding about the utility of your app. The more understanding they have, the more they will like your idea, and the better chance you have of finding investors. Explaining my concept in better details is something I should work on in my pitch as well.
Hi Patrick,
ReplyDeleteI like how you put the statistic for on average how long people wait in line. I think it is smart to point out how much your app is needed because it hooks the reader to listen. Also, adding more detail definitely helped your elevator pitch. I think if you make it sound less scripted this will further help your elevator pitch. Overall, great job!